Hi Natalie, This is a great introduction! The idea of wolfe having a blog is very interesting and something that definitely catches the audience's attention. I like how this is in his perspective and how he is bringing up such a big issue, destroying wildlife. I also really like how you made this modern with Starbucks and Wifi. I wonder if this young Wolf is an outcast in his pack, since he is the youngest and he seems more adaptive to modern ways. Also, do they encounter other packs as they move around? Will he make friends that feel the same about humans? I like how he told his struggles and said that sometimes he thinks what is would be like to be a pet, and all of this relates back to his pack having to move around a lot. I thought this was really good and I cannot wait to read more. Great job!
Natalie, First off, I love that your last name is Wolf and that you are creating a story from a wolf’s point of view. I really enjoyed your introduction to your project. I do not have much knowledge on wolves and it seems like you really know a lot about this species. You could add in specifically what prey wolves hunt and maybe information about the demographic that wolves live in. All of the mystery that Willis the wolf creates in the introduction makes me want to read the future stories. I’m a little confused on what the future stories could be about but once you have more of a direction you could add it into the introduction to help readers along. I was also a little confused on the name of the wolf, adding his name to the home page would be helpful. And maybe changing the name on the comment wall from the leo wolf to Willis the wolf (either name is good). Great project!
Hi Natalie, First of all, your blog is lovely! I like the format, as well as the pictures you chose. I also like how you added a link to your comment wall on your home page - I think I may borrow that idea :). You did a good job working detailed information about the wolf and his situation into the story introduction without it seeming overly factual. I am intrigued by what will come next, as I can see hints of one of the stories in his dreams of being a dog but in general is does not seem to be based on a story. I am particularly curious about the question that you pose and then postpone, about how he ends up being able to type. My main question (that I might should already know the answer to) is what is he afraid of some nights - the other wolves or humans?
Your comment wall picture along with the layout of your storybook homepage and introduction are very aesthetically pleasing. Your story seems to be based upon a public service announcement or an ad for the World Wildlife Fund. At first I almost thought it was cheesy, what with the mention of Starbucks, but the introduction grew on me with the more I read. The wolf being unapologetic and trying to be brave by doing this really adds to the story as well. It is also noteworthy that you had the wolf mention how he wants his blog to show how humans affect young wolves and not just all wolves. I don't know if you meant for that to be on purpose or not, but it seems well thought out. I haven't thought that very many of our classmates did a great job on their introductions, but I think you made a noteworthy effort. I'm sure your first story will not disappoint.
Hi Natalie! First off, I really like your banner photo. I was skimming through the story books and portfolios to find the one that I wanted to read and as soon as I clicked on your storybook, I immediately wanted to read it. I like that you are telling the story from the first person point of view. The third person point of view that stories are normally told in are so passive and they don’t give as much emotion or have as much character development. The active dialogue is so much more amusing to read. I love the humor and personality you put into Willis and how the storybook is a message to humans. It’s so funny that there happens to be a Starbucks in town. I like how Willis longs for freedom and refuses to be confined. Are you going to base your stories off of the readings from class or come up with your own? I’m really excited either way to read your stories!
Hi Natalie, First off, is Wolf really your last name? That's awesome! I really like the way you told the introduction! The first person from the wolf's point of view and how he directly addresses the human audience. Hahhah, he goes to a Starbucks alley to get internet access. This is awesome, you're a great writer! I definitely feel for Willis when he dreams about dog life. Your introduction doesn't give a lot of detail as to what exactly will be in the upcoming stories, and I'm definitely interested. Will it just be like his daily adventures? And will you be telling the story of what happens when his pack finds out! I'd really like to hear that! You've done a fantastic job so far, and I can't wait to read more! I also really like all the photos you've included in your project! And you've done a great job with the title "Freedom to a Wolf." Does this mean he will become truly free soon?
Hi Natalie, I'm excited to be back for the second installment of Willis the Wolf! Do wolves really generally hunt alone? I thought they hunted in packs. If so, it might be nice to explain why Willis specifically is required to hunt alone. I like how you've kept the Starbucks theme and the environmentalist theme going, and now introducing the dog who wants to be friends. It might be nice if you delved deeper into his connection with his pack and what makes him not want to sink to the level of being friends with a dog, even though he does not seem to be friends with his pack. I'm impressed that you're drawing out one story for your entire storybook. It definitely gives you room for a more subtle build-up, which is nice. You are giving us a good look into Willis's psyche. I look forward to seeing how the story continues, and if you will change the ending or not, and how.
Hi Natalie,
ReplyDeleteThis is a great introduction! The idea of wolfe having a blog is very interesting and something that definitely catches the audience's attention. I like how this is in his perspective and how he is bringing up such a big issue, destroying wildlife. I also really like how you made this modern with Starbucks and Wifi. I wonder if this young Wolf is an outcast in his pack, since he is the youngest and he seems more adaptive to modern ways. Also, do they encounter other packs as they move around? Will he make friends that feel the same about humans? I like how he told his struggles and said that sometimes he thinks what is would be like to be a pet, and all of this relates back to his pack having to move around a lot. I thought this was really good and I cannot wait to read more. Great job!
Natalie,
ReplyDeleteFirst off, I love that your last name is Wolf and that you are creating a story from a wolf’s point of view. I really enjoyed your introduction to your project. I do not have much knowledge on wolves and it seems like you really know a lot about this species. You could add in specifically what prey wolves hunt and maybe information about the demographic that wolves live in. All of the mystery that Willis the wolf creates in the introduction makes me want to read the future stories. I’m a little confused on what the future stories could be about but once you have more of a direction you could add it into the introduction to help readers along. I was also a little confused on the name of the wolf, adding his name to the home page would be helpful. And maybe changing the name on the comment wall from the leo wolf to Willis the wolf (either name is good). Great project!
Hi Natalie,
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, your blog is lovely! I like the format, as well as the pictures you chose. I also like how you added a link to your comment wall on your home page - I think I may borrow that idea :). You did a good job working detailed information about the wolf and his situation into the story introduction without it seeming overly factual. I am intrigued by what will come next, as I can see hints of one of the stories in his dreams of being a dog but in general is does not seem to be based on a story. I am particularly curious about the question that you pose and then postpone, about how he ends up being able to type. My main question (that I might should already know the answer to) is what is he afraid of some nights - the other wolves or humans?
Your comment wall picture along with the layout of your storybook homepage and introduction are very aesthetically pleasing. Your story seems to be based upon a public service announcement or an ad for the World Wildlife Fund. At first I almost thought it was cheesy, what with the mention of Starbucks, but the introduction grew on me with the more I read. The wolf being unapologetic and trying to be brave by doing this really adds to the story as well. It is also noteworthy that you had the wolf mention how he wants his blog to show how humans affect young wolves and not just all wolves. I don't know if you meant for that to be on purpose or not, but it seems well thought out. I haven't thought that very many of our classmates did a great job on their introductions, but I think you made a noteworthy effort. I'm sure your first story will not disappoint.
ReplyDeleteHi Natalie! First off, I really like your banner photo. I was skimming through the story books and portfolios to find the one that I wanted to read and as soon as I clicked on your storybook, I immediately wanted to read it. I like that you are telling the story from the first person point of view. The third person point of view that stories are normally told in are so passive and they don’t give as much emotion or have as much character development. The active dialogue is so much more amusing to read. I love the humor and personality you put into Willis and how the storybook is a message to humans. It’s so funny that there happens to be a Starbucks in town. I like how Willis longs for freedom and refuses to be confined. Are you going to base your stories off of the readings from class or come up with your own? I’m really excited either way to read your stories!
ReplyDeleteHi Natalie,
ReplyDeleteFirst off, is Wolf really your last name? That's awesome! I really like the way you told the introduction! The first person from the wolf's point of view and how he directly addresses the human audience. Hahhah, he goes to a Starbucks alley to get internet access. This is awesome, you're a great writer! I definitely feel for Willis when he dreams about dog life. Your introduction doesn't give a lot of detail as to what exactly will be in the upcoming stories, and I'm definitely interested. Will it just be like his daily adventures? And will you be telling the story of what happens when his pack finds out! I'd really like to hear that! You've done a fantastic job so far, and I can't wait to read more! I also really like all the photos you've included in your project! And you've done a great job with the title "Freedom to a Wolf." Does this mean he will become truly free soon?
Hi Natalie,
ReplyDeleteI'm excited to be back for the second installment of Willis the Wolf!
Do wolves really generally hunt alone? I thought they hunted in packs. If so, it might be nice to explain why Willis specifically is required to hunt alone.
I like how you've kept the Starbucks theme and the environmentalist theme going, and now introducing the dog who wants to be friends. It might be nice if you delved deeper into his connection with his pack and what makes him not want to sink to the level of being friends with a dog, even though he does not seem to be friends with his pack.
I'm impressed that you're drawing out one story for your entire storybook. It definitely gives you room for a more subtle build-up, which is nice. You are giving us a good look into Willis's psyche. I look forward to seeing how the story continues, and if you will change the ending or not, and how.